This is my first post. So please be gentle.


During these days, animals could now impregnate women after the chemical explosion in the next couty. The low radiation levels managed to alter the sperm in animals to the point where human impregnation was possible.


Karen was a widow living on a small farm outside of town. Her husband died in the chemical explosion a year earlier. She hasn't been with any men since her husband had died. She spends most of her days working at a restuarnt and taking care of her farm.
After her husband passed away, she sold most of the farm animals except for her brown stallion named Fuzz. Karen loved Fuzz and felt as though that he was her best friend. Karen was very lonely and masterbated almost every night with her 12 inch dildo.
During a hot summer day, Karen went out to the barn to see Fuzz. It must have been at least 100 degress inside the barn. Since no one was around, Karen stripped off all of her clothes and felt much cooler. She stepped into Fuzz's stall and began petting him and brushing his mane. She dropped the brush on the floor and bent over to pick it up. All of a sudden Fuzz stepped over the top of Karen pinning her down to the floor. She yelled for him to get up but Fuzz was more interested in her new position offering herself to him, as he thought. Karen felt Fuzz's 18 inch cock poking at her hole. With one thrust Fuzz penetrated Karen knocking the breath out of her. ( her dildo really did a stretchin number on her) Karen realized how great Fuzz was giving it to her. He was pounding her like a true stallion. Karen let him take his mare and she must have cum five times in the short session. Fuzz's head flared in her cunt and he shot a huge load right in her womb. Karen looked down at her stomach and it looked like she was 6 months pregnant from all the cum inside her. Fuzz slid out of her and Karen stood up and kissed Fuzz on the lips. His long tounge slid down her throat and she sucked on it. For the next few months, Fuzz was karens new boyfriend. Fuzz smashed that ass every evening. After two months Karens belly started to swell. She thought she was gaining wait, but after 4 months she new something was up. She took a pregnancy test and it was positive. Karens mouth dropped and she cried as she new Fuzz and gave her a baby inside her. She walked out to Fuzz and hugged him. Her fear turned to happiness when she realized she wanted to have Fuzz's baby and spend the rest of her life with Fuzz loving him. When 9 months passed Karens stomach was as big as a haybale and she must have weighed at least 300 pounds. She was spending the evening with Fuzz when her water broke. She spread a blanket out on the barn floor and spread her legs. She must have been in labor almost 12 hours when finally a baby colt popped out. It was a boy. Karen cried and kissed Fuzz. Karen and Fuzz have now had 3 more children together, all baby boys. Karen looks forward to when they all grow up because she wants to be gangbanged by all four of her boys.

i'm looking forward to replies on how I can improve on my stories. There will be more stories to come :D

Well, I gave you a 10 for your work and the effort you put into it, Thankyou! :D

As to some constructive criticism, these are my thoughts.

#1- add details, once you have added a lot, add more :lol: It helps a reader to visualize the scene if there are a lot of details.

#2- start with a slower plot and pick up speed leading to a.......well, climax :rolleyes: :lol: It gets people's attention and pulls them in if you tease them and drag them along an engaging story that keeps their attention.

#3- I hope this isn't being nitpicky, and I certainly don't want you to take this the wrong way........but, obvious misspellings can be really distracting and detract from the story you are trying to tell. If English isn't your native tongue I can certainly appreciate the frustrations of learning all the case, conjugations and syntax. English is a cobbled together mess of ancient Breton, Norse, Latin, French and a half dozen other languages that don't follow a standard (or logical) set of rules. A spell check program if you can get it would make English a lot easier to deal with. If a spell check program isn't availible a dictionary and thesaurus could help.

#4- Use a logical plot progression that show a plausible cause/effect relationship. I understand for example a farmwife shedding clothes on a hot day isn't a bad idea to advance the plot. However people who work on farms have cooler clothing for days like that and don't normally run around in the buff since things like barb wire, bug bites, splinters and the occasional nip from an animal hurt. Clothes, even light ones offer some protection from these things, believe me I know! :D But there are other details that could have been added to give her additional reasons to shuck off her clothes to move the plot along that way.

I hope I didn't discourage you, it was only my intent to give you some constructive criticism that you asked for and I hope that whatever you decide to take and use it will give you more enjoyment from your own work. Good luck

Great start orion and hopefully you will take dog's instructions to heart. He did a good job of laying out what you need to upgrade your writing to excellent standards. either way... please continue in your efforts as practise makes perfect. I'm sure Samuel Clements (Mark Twain) and many others started out the same way. Our style of writing here is just a bit racier is all so welcome to the club.

M. Lobo B)

a hot story and thanks for posting you lso get a 10 rating from me. and as dog said if you do what he has said you will gretly improve your writing skills. can hardly wait to read your next stories and good luck to you. :beer:

This was a pretty interesting story. Like doggowar said, I would expand on some stuff, and evolve the plot slower. It felt as if this were a summary.

Thanks for the story though, it was a interesting read.

wow awsome story!!!
yes explaine more but its good anyway and please write about her and all four boys :P

Great start, not being a writer here, I can say listen to the experts above, all good advice and it works with any audience. Now all we need to know is how are the colts (her little boys doing), I think she should be enjoying the fruits of her labours; well at least three of them.

:beer: :beer:

Great story! THanks for posting!
For suggestions, the only thing i could think of would be to add more detail; the feelings, sounds, thoughts, ect. WHen I write, I go by the old saying 'more is better'


Knotttt

Great story! It was really hot :D

Thank you for posting your story.

It's a fun read, but over too soon. I think the suggestions for more detail are right-on. Also more about Karen's reactions and emotions would be nice. I;m sure there is a lot of emotions one would go through on finding they were pregnant from a horse.

I wonder what the colt got from Karen, if its appearance came from Fuzz?

Please keep writing.

SusanMichelle

Don't stop writing! The concpet was great, but I do agree with dogowar about a little more details. Keep up the great writing!

Its good, but it would have been great if it would been longer... But thanks

great story thanks :P