ok guys give me some credit this is my first storie and i only got chapter one doen and i only did itr as an experiment to see if im a good writer or not :huh:




Hello my name is Azre and I am a dragon of the world althia. I am a warrior of the great lord Eros and a lover of the art of magick so this is my life as I know it.

Chapter one: the beginning.

“azre where are you?” said nasre my older brother I was the youngest of three Dragons but I was looked at as a freak because I was a mystic blue dragon as my two brothers were a dark red color like my father,
my mother died when I was born, my brothers always blamed me for her death.

As I sit on my bed looking out the window my brother walks in and pounces me, get off me nasre your too damn heavy, “make me you little wimp” said nasre.
Then my other brother walks in and jumps on both of us, seras get off us you jerk, “make me you wimps” said seras.

I manage to get away from my two jerk of a brothers before running out my room and heading out side to my father who was surveying the workers in the field gathering some herbs for our dinner tonight,
just wait I said to my father I’ll get back at them yet father you’ll see.


End chapter one


sorry if its short im new at this so you know thanx and i hope you enjoy

Good intro, looking forward to reading more from this :D

thanx for the coments an afro but i still need some ideas and a little haelp on it if anyone has any iedeas please feel free to tell me B)

This is a nice start. You can improve on your writing quite a lot, but I think that you just need to train and then you will be able to create a great story. So keep training by keep writing on this :).
I look forward to reading the next chapters.

Nice Start, sounds promissing. Keep it coming.

sorry but its gunna be a while before i get the next chapter up so please if anyone has any ideas that could help me on the next chapter that would be helpfull thanx

I'm not sure about the helping with the ideas, but, it might give the story more of a pull if you slowed down just a bit and developed the characters a bit more.
Hope that helped,

-ILTF ;)

well i got the next chapter done sooner then i thought i would so i hope you all like it and sorry if its short but here it is



Chapter 2: the meeting


I started to look around and there she was a beautiful grey dragoness about my age just slightly shorter then I was.
“Azre you know its not nice to stare” said my father as he laughed at me staring at the girl,
oh sorry I was just thinking, “ok well run along and say hi to the new girl but be nice” said my father, I will, then I walked along the field and was heading towards the girl before I got nervous and walked into the woods and went for a walk by myself,
“ugh what are you doin Azre you were right there and you chickened out like the wimp you are” I told myself as I walked along the path.
I was then interrupted when bumped into a dark red dragon standing in front of me smiling at me with yellow eyes,

I look up, “where you goin little one?” the mysterious dragon asked, “nowhere I was just out for a walk and why’s it your business?” I said tisk tisk tisk such sass from a drake, I would expect that form a girl but not you, any ways what’s your name little one? ask the red dragon
I’m Azre I live on the farm back there, what’s your name? I asked,
“oh where are my manners I’m zarex I’m sorry if I was rude its just rare for me to see a drake roaming around by himself especially a rare blue drake like you” said Zarex.

To be continued……

End chapter 2.



and the next chapter will have more about the chericters i promise :)

Sounds good. Its a little short but I kknow its hard to write longer section....the want to get it posted....the need for aproval. I know what your feeling :lol:

Keep it cominhg, it´s getting along nicely, although the chapters are a bit short, it´s good to read. *thumps up*

:rock:

*bumps the story up to page 1 again in hope to read more of it*

-_- sorry folks ive been buisy lately and i havent been able to write any more but i'll try to get to the next chapter tomorow or so any ways sorry about the wait <_<

Keep the good work up :). Good luck with the writing!

sorry it took so long but i finnaly got chapter 3 done so here it is and i hope you like ps. theres an early twist in the plot


Chapter 3: the kidnapping



That night as I was laying in bed when my door suddenly flew open and 4 strange dragons came running in grabbing me before stuffing me into a sack of some sorts then they ran out the house carrying me on their backs, before stopping to talk to another dragon that sounded like the red dragon for earlier.<where do you want the brat sir> asked one of the black dragons –tie him to that tree over there and I’ll deal with him later- said the mystery dragon. (oh god I’m gunna die) I thought to myself, as the dragons pulled me out of the sack I caught a look on the face of the dragon in front of me that realize that I wasn’t gunna die but I wasn’t gunna be treated nicely. ~what are you gunna do to me~ I ask
<you will see but it wont be me that does it to you> said the dragon as he tied me to the tree.

An hour later my fears were realized as the red dragon walked out of the tent over to the tree where I was tied. The he kneels in front of me before lifting my head up to where our eyes are level then with a soft voice he whispers in my as he wipes some dirt from my face. –don’t worry your ok I’m not gunna hurt you don’t listen to those fools over there, they’re just mad cuz I told them to be nice to you, any ways did they hurt you at all azre?- asked zarex ~ n-no not really the ropes just a bit tight that’s all~ I answered. –oh I’m sorry about that here let me help you with that- said zarex. ~thank you very much zarex~ I said, as he was untying my hands I caught a glimpse of his huge red member –you know its not nice to stare azre- said zarex.
~oh sorry I was just admiring your size I didn’t mean to stare at it~ I answered –its ok azre I undertsand you were just curious, ok fallow me and I’ll show you to your bed in the tent I don’t want you out in the cold- said zarex. Zarex stands up and then he helps me up before heading towards the tent as I fallow him I stare at his back curiously wondering what he’s thinking.





To be continued…………




End chapter 3.

Another good chapter. But you should keep practicing :)
And good luck, once again, with the writing of the next chapter!